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More fiction from the darkluna vaults
Mar. 9th, 2008 04:10 pmHi, and welcome to this week's edition of How Not To Write.
This is not from the epic Monkees fic. It's from the epic first novel, which has until now languished in well-deserved obscurity in the depths of my big box o' random old crap. I started it when I was 13. It is pretty bad. I found it on a backup disc, thank goodness. I don't think I could've stomached typing it in.
( Lulz )
This part was obviously written later, as it doesn't suck quite so hard, though I was still clearly so in love with my own narrative voice that I would've dry-humped it if I could have. Maybe I was 16 by this point? I was experimenting with using lots of different points of view. This character, Danielle, is the twin sister of Love Interest. Oh, I have no idea why I named him Connell, except that it was kind of similar to his sister's name, and I thought it was cool/amusing for him to have a nickname that was a girl's name. Whut, Younger Me, whut?
And yet, I actually don't hate this. Eventually I worked toward the idea of making the house a point-of-view character, and I think the seeds of that are in this part. I still can't decide if that's stupid or brilliant. It's such a fine line, y'know.
( All this and more?? )
Hmm, what can I torture you with next week? Ooh OOH! I once wrote this space-opera romance thing. With a heroine who was sekritly some variety of Chosen One, and a hero who was an outlaw but really a freedom fighter, and a wedding-day abduction. Oh, my babies. It tried so hard; bless its little heart. I seem to remember writing along in it and realizing even at the time that it was silly, and I jotted down something like "She was intensely annoyed at being locked into her cabin, but even more so by the fact that she was still in her damn wedding dress." :D
This is not from the epic Monkees fic. It's from the epic first novel, which has until now languished in well-deserved obscurity in the depths of my big box o' random old crap. I started it when I was 13. It is pretty bad. I found it on a backup disc, thank goodness. I don't think I could've stomached typing it in.
( Lulz )
This part was obviously written later, as it doesn't suck quite so hard, though I was still clearly so in love with my own narrative voice that I would've dry-humped it if I could have. Maybe I was 16 by this point? I was experimenting with using lots of different points of view. This character, Danielle, is the twin sister of Love Interest. Oh, I have no idea why I named him Connell, except that it was kind of similar to his sister's name, and I thought it was cool/amusing for him to have a nickname that was a girl's name. Whut, Younger Me, whut?
And yet, I actually don't hate this. Eventually I worked toward the idea of making the house a point-of-view character, and I think the seeds of that are in this part. I still can't decide if that's stupid or brilliant. It's such a fine line, y'know.
( All this and more?? )
Hmm, what can I torture you with next week? Ooh OOH! I once wrote this space-opera romance thing. With a heroine who was sekritly some variety of Chosen One, and a hero who was an outlaw but really a freedom fighter, and a wedding-day abduction. Oh, my babies. It tried so hard; bless its little heart. I seem to remember writing along in it and realizing even at the time that it was silly, and I jotted down something like "She was intensely annoyed at being locked into her cabin, but even more so by the fact that she was still in her damn wedding dress." :D
